“The Heart Base,
which is strong and proud,
fears nothing,
not even a cold shroud.
It’s white soldiers protect its red roads,
and fight to the death,
if told.
They were bold and brave,
better than Navy Seals if trained.
But not even they could fight off this attack,
so it fills their territory,
never to turn back.
They fight and rebel,
but the sickness still fills them.
Soon captured by true love,
to forever be a victim.”
So, please rate and comment on it.



10 has a great rhythm and it’s really “strong”
It doesn’t sound like a poem. It sounds like a fortune cookie.
4 – For being unoriginal and lacking poetic flow.
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